What is your opinion about actors or actresses who run for a position in politics?

2019-12-10 · 첨삭 강사 Avery

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I have seen few actors who run for a position in politics in Korea and USA. I can\'t say that they are not entitled to be politicians but many celebrities just are up for the election without proving their policies. I think that they are selected because of their popularity. We had minister of the Ministry of Culture before. He was famous actor. He appeared many dramas and movies since he was a teenagers. I am the one who love him. But I didn\'t like him after he perform his duty as a minister, because he didn\'t have his own policies. I think he was selected because he had a close relationship with ex-president and he might need for ex-president. In my opinion, celebrities would retire as their current occupation ration than being a politician.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Mr. [이름]! I really appreciate you sending in your compositions. Thanks for your opinion regarding artists running for politics.

A lot of celebrities in my country also do the same. Although some perform their duties efficiently, I would agree that some do not implement relevant policies.

Anyway, I hope you have an awesome day. I\'ll talk to you soon, Sir. ^_^

~T.Avery

I have seen few actors who run for a position in politics in Korea and USA.

>> I have seen few actors who run for a position in politics both in Korea and USA.

I can\'t say that they are not entitled to be politicians but many celebrities just are up for the election without proving their policies.

>> I can\'t say that they are not entitled to be politicians but many celebrities are just up for the election without proving their advocacies.

I think that they are selected because of their popularity.

>> CORRECT
We had minister of the Ministry of Culture before.

>> We had a minister from the Department of Culture before.

He was famous actor.

>> He was a famous actor.

He appeared many dramas and movies since he was a teenagers.

>> He appeared in many dramas and movies since he was a teenager.
I am the one who love him.

>> I loved him, myself.

OR>> I looked up to him, too.

But I didn\'t like him after he perform his duty as a minister, because he didn\'t have his own policies.

>>CORRECT

OR>> However, I didn\'t like him after he performed his duty as a minister because he hadn\'t implemented his own policies.

I think he was selected because he had a close relationship with ex-president and he might need for ex-president.

>> I think he was selected because he had a close relationship with the ex-president and might have asked for help from him.
In my opinion, celebrities would retire as their current occupation ration than being a politician.

>> In my opinion, celebrities should stay in their current occupation rather than being a politician.

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