What is your opinion about the coastal areas in Korea being covered in garbage and debris? What prob
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After Some typhoons were passing through Korea, Strong winds and heavy rain swept all kinds of staff to the ocean, and some of them have remained on shore. 
Most of them were essential parts in our lives, but now, they are useless. What a sad thing for the people who got damaged on their properties from the heartless disasters. 
Unfortunately, these wastes would cause other difficulties. The damaged people have to clean them up and rearrange their territory. It would take to recover all scars and return to their normal lives. 
Furthermore, we could say that left debris on the coastal areas might be rather than much more garbage has been floated to the ocean where we can rarely go out and recollect it. Things made only for human beings are just harmful for all the other creatures. We hurt again our Mother Earth though there wasn’t any intention.
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~Lucy
After Some typhoons were passing through Korea, Strong winds and heavy rain swept all kinds of staff to the ocean, and some of them have remained on shore. 
>>After some typhoons passing through Korea, strong winds and heavy rain swept all kinds of staff to the ocean, and some of them have remained on shore.
Most of them were essential parts in our lives, but now, they are useless.
>>CORRECT!
What a sad thing for the people who got damaged on their properties from the heartless disasters.
>>CORRECT!
Unfortunately, these wastes would cause other difficulties.
>>CORRECT!
The damaged people have to clean them up and rearrange their territory.
>>The damaged possession of some people have to clean them up and rearrange their territory.
It would take to recover all scars and return to their normal lives.
>>CORRECT!
Furthermore, we could say that left debris on the coastal areas might be rather than much more garbage has been floated to the ocean where we can rarely go out and recollect it.
>>Furthermore, we could say that left debris on the coastal areas might has more garbages floating to the ocean where we can rarely go out and recollect it.
Things made only for human beings are just harmful for all the other creatures.
>>Things made only for human beings are just harmful for all of the creatures.
We hurt again our Mother Earth though there wasn’t any intention.
>>CORRECT!
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