what is your opinion about woman in the military?
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Hi Jane,
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts about women
serving in the military. I agree to most of what you have to say
about this issue.
In the Philippines, women also serve in our armed forces but it
is not mandatory. Men likewise are not obliged or forced to join
the military. Enlisting for the armed forces in the Philippines is
voluntary. :)
Teacher Sarah
TO Sarah
In korea, until now
usually, the army were considered to be a thing of man but I think that woman also have to go to the army.
>> In Korea, it is mandatory for all men to serve in the army but I think women should also go to the army.
There are several reasons.
>> CORRECT
OR: Here are the reasons for that.
The fitst, Korean people have divided into two country since korean war
now,It\'s a only divided country all around world.
>> First, Korea was divided into two countries since the Korean War.
Today, it\'s the only divided country in the world.
The second, the population is aging. [이름] people decreased rapidly.
>> Second, the population is aging. The [이름]er generation is decreasing rapidly.
The third, marriage and birth is not model of woman life any more so a variety of choice would be opened for them
>> Third, marriage and childbirth is not anymore the only option for modern women so there are many opportunities for them.
Finally, most of people assume that physical condition of woman is not suited for the army. modern war does not always needed of physical fight. In some case, the waman who have delicatness will be comply with their purpose.
>> Finally, most people assume that women are not physically fit or suited for the army. Modern war doesn\'t necessarily involve physical fights or warfare. In some cases, women who are delicate yet intellectually capable can comply with their goals and purposes.
what about the Philippines ?
From Jane
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