What is your opinion about women in military?
학생이 쓴 원문
Dear [Name],
Frankly, I think it is nacessary. Because population is getting down and women are getting strong.
If a man fight a woman, old time, most of people think man will win, but now it is not true.
Some women fight very well and body, tall, waight is higher than man\'s.
Sometime, I feel some scarery to see big woman.
So I think, if women go to military service, no problem.
Women are claver and detail charactor.
Actually, my son is very weak. If he fight woman, I think, he will be defeat.
Thanks.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! :)
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Have a wonderful day. :)
- Tricia
Frankly, I think it is nacessary. Because population is getting down and women are getting strong.
>> Frankly, I think it is necessary. Because the population is getting down and women are getting stronger.
If a man fight a woman, old time, most of people think man will win, but now it is not true.
>> If a man fights a woman in the old-time, most people think the man will win. Which is no longer the case now.
Some women fight very well and body, tall, waight is higher than man\'s.
>> Some women fight very well. Some of them are taller and heavier than most men.
Sometime, I feel some scarery to see big woman.
>> Sometime, I feel scared to see a big woman.
So I think, if women go to military service, no problem.
>> So I think it\'s not a problem if women go to the military.
Women are claver and detail charactor.
>> Women are clever and have detailed characters.
Actually, my son is very weak. If he fight woman, I think, he will be defeat.
>> Actually, my son is very weak. If he fights a woman, I think, he will be defeated.
Thanks.
>> CORRECT!
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