What is your opinion about women in the military?
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For a long time, it has been considered that military is related to only men because it requires considerable stength. Besides, in most of cases men attended the war when the war occurred. However, I sometimes see women in the military these days and military service is not exclusive property of men.
I think that women in the military are nice. The first reason is that they put themselves in the military as they want to be in it. I think that such a decision requires formidable brave. The second reason is that the intrinsic difference between man and woman can cause women to go through difficulty. Nevertheless, there are many women who adapt for military and even do better than men. This is the evidence that women do their best.
Of course, there might some people who aganist for women in the military. But, it's their decision and they are having an effort to complete their duty despite of many disadvantages. So, I rather want to support women in the military and I'm proud of them.
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Good afternoon Miss [이름]!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts and ideas about women entering the military. They are really really so we should eb proud of them. ~Kelly^^
For a long time, it has been considered that military is related to only men because it requires considerable stength.
>> For a long time, it has been considered that the military is only for men because it requires considerable strength.
Besides, in most of cases men attended the war when the war occurred.
>> Besides, in most of cases were sent to defend their country during a war.
However, I sometimes see women in the military these days and military service is not exclusive property of men.
>> However, I sometimes see women in the military these days and it is no longer exclusive for men.I think that women in the military are nice.
>> Correct.
The first reason is that they put themselves in the military as they want to be in it.
>> The first reason is that they put themselves in the military because they want to be there.
I think that such a decision requires formidable brave.
>> I think that such a decision requires formidable bravery.
The second reason is that the intrinsic difference between man and woman can cause women to go through difficulty.
>> The second reason is the intrinsic difference between men and women in terms of the level of difficulty that they go through.
Nevertheless, there are many women who adapt for military and even do better than men.
>> Nevertheless, there are many women who adapt the military life and even do better than men.
This is the evidence that women do their best.>> This is an evidence that women give their best in what they do.Of course, there might some people who aganist for women in the military.
>> Of course, there are some people who are aganist women in the military.
But, it\'s their decision and they are having an effort to complete their duty despite of many disadvantages.
>> But, it\'s their decision and they are giving their effort to complete their duty despite the many disadvantages.
So, I rather want to support women in the military and I\'m proud of them. >> So, I would rather support women in the military and be proud of them.
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