What is your opinion about women in the military?
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Korea is a conscripted country. This is unfortunately stipulated by the constitution as a duty of men (male).
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So in the past, the only way women could go to the army was to become a nurse officer. I think this limits women\'s social role based on discriminatory gender roles. However, with the recent increase in women\'s human rights, there is a wider range of social opportunities for women to enter. This expanded the role of women in the military as well.
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Up until the \'90s, ROTCs in universities were only available for men, but after the 2000s, women were also allowed to apply.
>> Up until the \'90\'s, ROTC\'s in universities were only available for men, but after the 2000\'s, women were also allowed to apply.
As a result, the number of female officers is increasing, not nursing officers. I think this is an important change that shows that women also have the ability to do as well as men.
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