What is your opinion about women in the military?
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I think gender is unrelated to occupation.
So, if woman wants to be a soldier, it is very natural for woman to be in the military.
And there was a program which entertainers live in the military.
There were even women entertainers.
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I think gender is unrelated to occupation.
>> I think gender is unrelated to the occupation.
So, if woman wants to be a soldier, it is very natural for woman to be in the military.
>> So, if a woman wants to be a soldier, it is very natural for a woman to be in the military.
And there was a program which entertainers live in the military.
>> And there was a program in which entertainers live in the military.
There were even women entertainers.
>> They are even women entertainers.
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