What is your opinion for violence on TV
학생이 쓴 원문
Dear [Name].
I love peace. I opposite violence.
A violence make another violence.
When I was young, I fighted my friend. I hit him. He was hurt, so I kept in mind not to fight anybody after that.
In korea, when it is meddle school, child fight their friends. Some case, several child hit one child. It is very unfair and bad social problem. That is serious why young child suicide.
A few years ago, I watched bad news like this problem on TV. How about your country?
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! :)
When I was young, I fighted my friend. I hit him.
In korea, when it is meddle school, child fight their friends.
A few years ago, I watched bad news like this problem on TV.
I appreciate your effort in writing a composition.
Have a wonderful day. :)
- Tricia
Dear [Name].
>>
I love peace. I opposite violence.
I love peace. I opposite violence.
>> I love peace and its the opposite of violence.
A violence make another violence.
>> One violence can lead to another violence.
When I was young, I fighted my friend. I hit him.
>> When I was young, I fought with my friend and hit him.
He was hurt, so I kept in mind not to fight anybody after that.
>> He got hurt, so I kept in mind not to fight with anybody again since that day.
In korea, when it is meddle school, child fight their friends.
>> In Korea, it\'s normal for middle school students to fight or have an argument with their friends.
Some case, several child hit one child. It is very unfair and bad social problem.
>> In some cases, a child hitting another child is an unfair situation and also a social problem.
That is serious why young child suicide.
>> Which sometimes could lead to depression and suicide for children.
A few years ago, I watched bad news like this problem on TV.
>> A few years ago, I watched a bad news related to this problem on TV.
How about your country?
>> How about in your country?
[ This is also a major problem here in my country, we call it \"bullying\". Most people don\'t take it seriously which makes it harder to solve or be fixed. ]
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