What is your opinion of gender equality?
학생이 쓴 원문
Gender equality is important cause it is terms of equal opportunity. We must concede that men and women is not different. They are person. Sexism make a wall each other and then we will be happy.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! You are indeed right especially in our generation now. Everything is made possible and everything is made to protect the importance of humans. :)
Until the next one!
See you in class! :)
~Teacher Sheila
>>Gender equality is important cause it is a term of equal opportunity.
We must concede that men and women is not different.
>>CORRECT
OR>>We must concede that men and women are just the same.
They are person.
>>They are persons.
OR>>They are humans.
Sexism make a wall each other and then we will be happy.
>>Sexism makes a wall to divide the gender.
OR>>If we remove the wall of sexism then we will be happy.
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