What is your opinion of “job security”? How do you define “job security”?
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Job security is the probability that an individual will keep their job with a slight chance of losing it. In my opinion, this guaranteed level has ruined the ownership of various public officials in South Korea. I would define job security as ensuring a constant workload to whom is ready. There is a norm in the Korean workplace not to be enthusiastic and not to be bombarded with work. Therefore, I will add a quality job with growth opportunities. Since administrative and routine tasks are also working but decrease motivation, job security would guarantee quality work to every employee. Recently, I visited the borough office to issue a registered copy. There, I witnessed the mind-blowing scene in which the worker went through similar procedures to issue a paper and was eventually harassed by the visitor from the delay. This problem can be solved by investment in machinery, and I believe this is job security to make civil workers stay in their posts for a long-time.
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Thank you for this Aciel!
Job security is the probability that an individual will keep their job with a slight chance of losing it.
>>> correct
In my opinion, this guaranteed level has ruined the ownership of various public officials in South Korea.
>>> correct
I would define job security as ensuring a constant workload to whom is ready.
>>> correct
There is a norm in the Korean workplace not to be enthusiastic and not to be bombarded with work.
>>> correct
Therefore, I will add a quality job with growth opportunities.
>>> correct
Since administrative and routine tasks are also working but decrease motivation, job security would guarantee quality work to every employee.
>>> Since administrative and routine tasks are also work but with low motivation, job security would guarantee quality work to every employee.
Recently, I visited the borough office to issue a registered copy.
>>> correct
There, I witnessed the mind-blowing scene in which the worker went through similar procedures to issue a paper and was eventually harassed by the visitor from the delay.
>>> correct
This problem can be solved by investment in machinery, and I believe this is job security to make civil workers stay in their posts for a long-time.
>>> correct
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