What is your opinion of the alleged commercialization of Christmas?
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I think that the commercialization of Christmas is a good phenomenon. Because Christmas is just a holiday and the commercialization is good for economy. But it is just a holiday, so companies shouldn\'t depend on the Christmas.
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On a different note, this holiday season, let’s make it a point to cherish what’s truly important in our lives.\" Let\'s have a safe, healthy, and Merry Christmas!
Cheers,
Jean~~
I think that the commercialization of Christmas is a good phenomenon. Because Christmas is just a holiday and the commercialization is good for economy.
>> I think that the commercialization of Christmas is a good phenomenon because this event is just a holiday and the commercialization is good for the economy.
But it is just a holiday, so companies shouldn\'t depend on the Christmas.
>> But it is just a holiday, so companies shouldn\'t depend on the Christmas season.
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