What is your paradise?

2011-06-28 · 첨삭 강사 camille

학생이 쓴 원문

Though I have never been there, My paradise is Austrailia. Since I like being in nature, Austailia will be perfect place for me. Fishing in the sea, trekking on desert or forest and meeting Kangaroos Many things are enough to satisfy myself. Some of my friends visited there , and they told me it was great. If I have any chane , I will visit there.

강사 첨삭

Hello my dear [이름]! Thank you so much for sharing your desire to visit Australia. I know that you will enjoy the place. And i also hope that you could really go there. Good luck to you and have a happy day!!!

 

Though I have never been there, My paradise is Austrailia.

>>correct!

>> Although I have never visited Australia, I consider it as my paradise.
Since I like being in nature,

>> Since I am a nature lover.

>> Since I love nature.
Austailia will be perfect place for me.

>> Australia will be a perfect place for me.
Fishing in the sea, trekking on desert or forest and
meeting Kangaroos

>> I would love to go fishing, trekking in the forest or desert. I also want to see kangaroos.
Many things are enough to satisfy myself.

>>correct!

>> There are many things that I can do there to satisfy myself.
Some of my friends visited there , and they told me it was great.

>.correct!

>> Some of my friends who visited Australia told me that it is a great place.
If I have any chane , I will visit there.

>>* chance

>> If I have any chance, I will go there.

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