What is your proudest accomplishment so far this year?

2021-11-23 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I think my proudest accomplishment so far this year is that I met my greatest friends. I was really worried about my new friends. But I came in my class and I met my new friends. They were very suitable to me and I think I am happy with my friends. We play together and if there are some problems, we figure them our together. So I think my proudest accomplishment so far this year is that I met my friends.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]:)

Friends really are a big part of our lives. They are the usual people we hang out with. Choosing our friends is very vital in our lives and I think you made the right choice.

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I think my proudest accomplishment so far this year is that I met my greatest friends.

>> I think my proudest accomplishment so far this year is meeting my greatest friends.

I was really worried about my new friends.

>> CORRECT

But I came in my class and I met my new friends.

>> But the moment I came in our class, I met them.

They were very suitable to me and I think I am happy with my friends.

>> They are very suitable for me and I am very happy with them.

We play together and if there are some problems, we figure them our together.

>> We play together and if there are some problems, we figure them out together.

So I think my proudest accomplishment so far this year is that I met my friends.

>> So that is why I think my proudest accomplishment this year is meeting my friends.

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