What is your ultimate bonding with your friends?
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Well, wouldn\'t the ultimate bonding be made into a common interests?
The common interests depend on the age group.
When I was very young, playing with my friends was a common interest, so I think I made the ultimate bonding by using toys.
When I was in elementary school, TV programs and foods sold at th stationary store in front of the school made the ultimate bonding with my friends.
In middle and high school, K-pop idols were mainly spoken with friends, so we created an ultimate bonding by talking about idols we like each other.
When I went to the university, I talked about our major, score, and love, but now that I got a job at a company, I\'m building a bond by talking about each other\'s company, colleagues, bosses, and work. Maybe we get older, we will build a bond by taking about each other\'s wives, husbands, children, and homes.
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Here are some areas for improvement:
1. The common interests depend on the age group.
>>Common interests depend on the age group.
2. When I was very young, playing with my friends was a common interest, so I think I made the ultimate bonding by using toys.
>>When I was very young, playing with my friends was a common interest, so I think we formed strong bonds through toys.
3. When I was in elementary school, TV programs and foods sold at th stationary store in front of the school made the ultimate bonding with my friends.
>>When I was in elementary school, TV programs and the food sold at the stationery store in front of the school helped create ultimate bonding with my friends.
4. In middle and high school, K-pop idols were mainly spoken with friends, so we created an ultimate bonding by talking about idols we like each other.
>>In middle and high school, my friends and I mainly talked about K-pop idols, and we formed strong bonds by discussing the idols we liked.
5. When I went to the university, I talked about our major, score, and love, but now that I got a job at a company, I\'m building a bond by talking about each other\'s company, colleagues, bosses, and work.
>>When I went to university, my friends and I talked about our majors, grades, and love lives. Now that I have a job, I build bonds by talking about each other’s companies, colleagues, bosses, and work.
6. Maybe we get older, we will build a bond by taking about each other\'s wives, husbands, children, and homes.
>>As we get older, we will build bonds by talking about each other’s wives, husbands, children, and homes.
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