What is your view on the idea of the importance of what lies within a person?

2015-11-12 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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Do you mean the personality? I think the inside personality is very important. For example, the politicians do the voluntary activities and they release the article about their good deed. However, in their mind that is just a show, not voluntary. Also, they just pretend to help that person. As the result of that show eventually the poor people suffer from that uncharity work. Most young people fully know about their show, but the elder person who can access the internet. They might believe that they saw on the TV and they give their votes to he/her. However someone who have a real sincere heart, they really help the person even small thing and eventually they can make the world better place. Unfortunately, it is difficult to find the person who appearance and act just like as their inside.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! (^^,) The phrase, \"what lies inside a person\" refers to a person\'s core values. Who are the nice people and who are the fake ones? It seems simple but when you really think about it, it\'s actually a lot more complicated than most people think. As I write my reflection in our composition board today,  I can\'t help but remember the fake people who came into my life and all those moments I got enticed with their open arms and big hellos. We must be careful of fake people. They have their own hidden agenda (like the politicians you\'ve mentioned). They will try to use other people to advance themselves  in this rat race we call life. You\'re right when you said it\'s difficult to distinguish the fake from the real ones. I hope that you\'d be able to learn how to weed out the fake people from the real people in your life. I had to learn it the hard way and for some time, I had to deal with serious trust issues. I\'m glad that I was able to overcome it. I hope you have a wonderful day [이름]. See you again tomorrow. Take care always. ~Teacher Charry (^__^) I think the inside personality is very important. >> I think a person\'s core values are very important. For example, the politicians do the voluntary activities and they release the article about their good deed. >> For example, politicians do voluntary activities and release articles about their good deeds. However, in their mind that is just a show, not voluntary. >> However, in their minds those are just for show and not a voluntary act. Also, they just pretend to help that person. >> Also, they just pretend to help other people. OR >> In addition to that, they just pretend to help other people. As the result of that show eventually the poor people suffer from that uncharity work. >> As a result of that show, the poor people eventually suffer. OR >>  As a result, the poor people eventually suffer from their fake charity work. Most young people fully know about their show, but the elder person who can access the internet. >> Most young people fully know about their show, but the elder people who cannot access the internet may not be aware of it. They might believe that they saw on the TV and they give their votes to he/her. >> They might believe that they saw on TV and they give their votes to these fake politicians. However someone who have a real sincere heart, they really help the person even small thing and eventually they can make the world better place. >> However, there are some people who have real sincere hearts and they help other people even on small things. These people make the world a better place to live in. Unfortunately, it is difficult to find the person who appearance and act just like as their inside. >> Unfortunately, it is difficult to find a person who acts out of a good heart and not out of an ulterior motive.

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