What job would you be terrible at?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think all celebrities appeared on TV or movies are the terrible job ever, because they always suffer from the negative comments even though they don\'t commit any crime. Public people usually don\'t allow celebrities to make a mistake even if it is the thing that can consider as small mistake. We have seen a lot of news about celebrities who commit suicide because of their psychical disorder. That might cause from negative comments. I am not sure if I can live as a TV star. They have to hide their emotion and must show nice impressions to the public. They are also required to higher sense of ethics than others. I can understand a little bit why we ask them to be careful in any situations, but I sometimes think that to ask high morals is too harsh for them. They are one of the public and they are not different with general people. They have same right to enjoy their life as public.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Mr. [이름]! Thanks for your entry. ^^ I very much appreciate it.
Below are a few corrections. See you next class! ^_^
~T.Avery
I think all celebrities appeared on TV or movies are the terrible job ever, because they always suffer from the negative comments even though they don\'t commit any crime.>>I think all celebrities appearing on TV or movies have the most terrible job ever, because they always suffer from negative comments even though they don\'t commit any crime.
Public people usually don\'t allow celebrities to make a mistake even if it is the thing that can consider as small mistake.
>>The public usually don\'t tolerate celebrities making mistakes no matter how small their error may be.
We have seen a lot of news about celebrities who commit suicide because of their psychical disorder.
>>CORRECT
That might cause from negative comments.
>>That might have been caused by negative comments they\'re receiving.
I am not sure if I can live as a TV star.
>>CORRECT
They have to hide their emotion and must show nice impressions to the public.
>>CORRECT
They are also required to higher sense of ethics than others.
>>They are also required to have a higher sense of ethics than others.
I can understand a little bit why we ask them to be careful in any situations, but I sometimes think that to ask high morals is too harsh for them.
>>I can understand a little bit why we ask them to be careful in any situation, but I sometimes think that asking them to always carry high morals is too harsh for them.
They are one of the public and they are not different with general people.
>>CORRECT
They have same right to enjoy their life as public.
>>They have the same right to enjoy their life as members of the public.
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