What kind of art do you think is the most interesting?
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There are various arts in the world: music, pottery, painting, etc. I think that music is the most interesting art because there are two reasons for this.
First of all, music is comprised of a various of genre. Of course, other arts, such as painting, also consist of diverse sorts, but I think music has more various genre than any other arts.It contains Hip-Hop, Jazz, Dance, Balad, and etc. People can enjoy any genres they like.
Secondly, everyone who has not special ability can enjoy it. This is crucial reason why I think that music is the most fascinating art. The painting or pottery is a little hard to enjoy if someone has not a professional eye or ability, while everyone sings a song and listens to music easily.
Last, music has a power to impress people. People can get happy or consoled when they are listening to music. When I'm blue, I also get happy listening to my favorite music.
For those three reasons, I think that music is the most interesting art.
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Music has a profound effect on our body and psyche. As a matter of fact, there\'s a growing field of health care known as music therapy which uses music to heal. Music can be used in daily life for relaxation, to gain energy when feeling drained, for catharsis when dealing with emotional stress, and in other ways as well.
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There are various arts in the world: music, pottery, painting, etc.
>> Correct.
>> OR: There are various forms of art such as music, pottery, painting, etc.
I think that music is the most interesting art because there are two reasons for this.
>> Correct.
>> I think that music is the most interesting form of art because there are two reasons for this.
First of all, music is comprised of a various of genre.
>> First of all, music is comprised of various genres.
Of course, other arts, such as painting, also consist of diverse sorts, but I think music has more various genre than any other arts.
>> Of course, other arts, such as painting, also consists of diverse types, but I think music has different genres than any other arts.
It contains Hip-Hop, Jazz, Dance, Balad, and etc.
>> It contains hip-hop, jazz, dance, ballad, etc.
People can enjoy any genres they like.
>> Correct.
Secondly, everyone who has not special ability can enjoy it.
>> Secondly, everyone who doesn\'t have a special ability can enjoy it.
This is crucial reason why I think that music is the most fascinating art.
>> This is an important reason why I think that music is the most fascinating art.
The painting or pottery is a little hard to enjoy if someone has not a professional eye or ability, while everyone sings a song and listens to music easily.
>> Painting or pottery is a little hard to enjoy if someone does not have a professional eye for it, while everyone can sing and listen to music easily.Last, music has a power to impress people.
>> Lastly, music has a power to impress people.
People can get happy or consoled when they are listening to music.
>> People can be happy or consoled when they are listening to music.
When I\'m blue, I also get happy listening to my favorite music.
>> When I\'m blue, I also feel happy listening to my favorite music.For those three reasons, I think that music is the most interesting art.
>> Correct.
>> OR: For those three reasons, I think that music is the most interesting form of art.
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