What kind of cause or charity organizations are you particularly interested in?

2022-01-04 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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Recently, I have been interested in environmental protection, especially biodiversity protection. I am also a long-term donor for the World Wildlife Fund. With a significant interest in ESG topics as a finance graduate, I was navigating the method to have a positive impact on society. Especially for environmental factors, I was keen on the topic because the influence is evident, and there is a high demand for financial capital than any other factors. On top of that, ruin to biodiversity negatively impacts human beings because it is related to our livelihood. According to the latest research, 15% to 45% of World GDP is linked to biodiversity. Also, another analysis indicates that associated loss of biodiversities such as coral reef, forest and grassland could drain $10tn from the global economy by 2050. In conclusion, I am keen on the environmental protection topic, especially for biodiversity protection with sustainable development and global welfare.

강사 첨삭

Thanks for this as well Aciel. Have a good day!

Recently, I have been interested in environmental protection, especially biodiversity protection. 
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I am also a long-term donor for the World Wildlife Fund. 
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>>> OR: I have also been a long-term donor for the World Wildlife Fund.  
With a significant interest in ESG topics as a finance graduate, I was navigating the method to have a positive impact on society. 
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Especially for environmental factors, I was keen on the topic because the influence is evident, and there is a high demand for financial capital than any other factors. 
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On top of that, ruin to biodiversity negatively impacts human beings because it is related to our livelihood. 
>>> correct  
According to the latest research, 15% to 45% of World GDP is linked to biodiversity. 
>>> correct  
Also, another analysis indicates that associated loss of biodiversities such as coral reef, forest and grassland could drain $10tn from the global economy by 2050. 
>>> correct  
In conclusion, I am keen on the environmental protection topic, especially for biodiversity protection with sustainable development and global welfare.
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