What kind of device should be invented in order for our lives to become easier and convenient? Expla

2021-08-11 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I think if we want to live more easier and convenient, we have to invent the device that can make planet\'s environment more clean. Nowadays, our planet\'s environment is really bad because of we and this environment problems will cause more bigger problems. So if we invent the device that can make planet\'s environment clean, it will prevent more bigger problems that the pollution will cause. So I think if we want to live more easier and convenient, we have to invent the device that can make planet\'s environment more clean.

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Hi [이름]! ^^

Over the years, technology has revolutionized our world and daily lives. Additionally, technology for seniors has created amazing tools and resources, putting useful information at our fingertips. Modern technology has paved the way for multi-functional devices like the smartwatch and the smartphone. Computers are increasingly faster, more portable, and higher-powered than ever before. With all of these revolutions, technology has also made our lives easier, faster, better, and more fun.

Your suggestion is actually a good choice. :)

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I think if we want to live more easier and convenient, we have to invent the device that can make planet\'s environment more clean.

>>I think if we want to live more easier and convenient, we have to invent a device that can make the planet\'s environment cleaner.

Nowadays, our planet\'s environment is really bad because of we and this environment problems will cause more bigger problems.

>>Nowadays, our planet\'s environment is really bad because of what we are doing to the environment which will cause bigger problems.

So if we invent the device that can make planet\'s environment clean, it will prevent more bigger problems that the pollution will cause.

>> So if we invent a device that can make the planet\'s environment cleaner, it will prevent more bigger problems that pollution will cause.

So I think if we want to live more easier and convenient, we have to invent the device that can make planet\'s environment more clean.

>> So, I think if we want to live more easier and convenient, we have to invent a device that can make the planet\'s environment cleaner.

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