What kind of exercise would you recommend to stay healthy?
학생이 쓴 원문
I would like to recommend 2 kinds of workout for staying healthy.
First, it is a weightlifting. It is good for us to gain many muscles, because people tend to lose muscles as they gets old.
Gaining muscles is essential for our body.
Second, i would like to recommend yoga. Doing yoga helps our body stretch and relax.
Also, it also is helpful for our mind, as yoga contains meditation.
Doing both makes good synergy and make a balance for body.
강사 첨삭
Hi Serena!
Take note of the proper use of articles and usage of words.
You can use the suggested patterns in your future compositions.
Keep up the good work!
~~ Teacher Sharon
I would like to recommend 2 kinds of workout for staying healthy.
>> I would like to recommend two kinds of workouts for staying healthy.
First, it is a weightlifting.
>> First, there is weightlifting.
It is good for us to gain many muscles, because people tend to lose muscles as they gets old.
>> It helps us gain muscle because people tend to lose muscle as they get older.
Gaining muscles is essential for our body.
>> Gaining muscle is essential for our bodies.
Second, i would like to recommend yoga.
>> Second, I would like to recommend yoga.
Doing yoga helps our body stretch and relax.
>> Doing yoga helps our bodies stretch and relax.
Also, it also is helpful for our mind, as yoga contains meditation.
>> It is also helpful for our minds because yoga includes meditation.
Doing both makes good synergy and make a balance for body.
>> Doing both creates good synergy and provides a balance to our health.
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