What kind of government does your country have?
학생이 쓴 원문
My country has a democratic government.
It was built through the sacrifices of many people.
So we must strive to protect it.
강사 첨삭
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What kind of government does your country have?
My country has a democratic government.
>>> OR: My country operates under a democratic system.
It was built through the sacrifices of many people.
>>> It was built on the sacrifices of many.
So we must strive to protect it.
>>> Therefore, we must strive to protect it.
>>> OR: Hence, it is our responsibility to safeguard it.
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