What kind of organization are you dreaming of creating?

2022-06-02 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

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I want to make an organization for my realistic dreaming. My dream is to make a program developing department. I want to get a patent for something software and an application for my business later. If I will be got the patent, I have the patent and make my team.

강사 첨삭

Good day, Jay!
Setting a goal pushes you to work well right. I hope you\'ll be able to establish your dream in the near future.
See you in class later. Thank you for sharing your thought.
T. Aki~
I want to make an organization for my realistic dreaming. 
>>> I want to make an organization for my dream to come true.
My dream is to make a program developing department. 
>>> CORRECT
I want to get a patent for something software and an application for my business later.
>>> I want to get a software patent for something and an application for my business later.
If I will be got the patent, I have the patent and make my team
>>> If I got the patent, I can make my team.
>>> If I got the patent, I can create my team.

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