What kind of phone do you have? etc.
학생이 쓴 원문
What kind of phone do you have?
How often do you use your phone?
What feature do you enjoy using with your phone?
I usually do many things using my phone.
because It is thin and light that I can carry easily wherever I go.
so I always chat with my co-worker during working hours and I often chat with my friend and family.
I can send them an announcement through the group chat
I some time watch a movie when I have free some time at night.
also I am able to download movies and YouTube video and I also use navigation.
It is very useful to me, I can search information that I don\'t know.
I also transfer it to other people and I shop online.
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon, Julia!
You did great on your sentences, Those tiny corrections can help you improve your writing os I hope that you will pay more attention on small details. By the ways, sometimes and some time are two different things. We\'ll talk about that tomorrow :)
Have a good afternoon.
Aki~
I usually do many things using my phone.
>>> CORRECT!
because It is thin and light that I can carry easily wherever I go.
>>> CORRECT!
so I always chat with my co-worker during working hours and I often chat with my friend and family.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >> So I always chat with my co-worker during working hours and with my friends and family as well.
I can send them an announcement through the group chat
>>> CORRECT!
I some time watch a movie when I have free some time at night.
>>> I sometimes watch a movie when I have free time at night.
also I am able to download movies and YouTube video and I also use navigation.
>>> I am also able to download movies and YouTube videos. I also use its navigation feature.
It is very useful to me, I can search information that I don\'t know.
>>> It is very useful to me, I can search for information that I don\'t know.
I also transfer it to other people and I shop online.
>>> I can also use to transfer money to other people and I can shop online.
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