What kind of second job do you want to have?
학생이 쓴 원문
Well, before mentioning about the second job, I\'d like to comment about reality that I have to work harder than Korea.
In the US, it is quite common to have second job because, there are many companies that they have small times to work, so it would be possible to work more. It is impossible to imagine to find a second job in Korea since working time is already enough for employees.
Anyway, I want to get a second job another dialysis unit. In order to adjust in America\'s working places quickly, I\'d like to find another one as much as possible. Besides, I heard about school nurse that is having short time working hours such as 7-8 hours. So, if given a chance, I want to try those fields. Therefore, finally, I want to live stably in the US in the near future.
강사 첨삭
Hello there again, [이름]!
I agree with you. The primary reason most people get a second job in America is to earn extra income. Just avoid being burnt out and always find time for your family.
As you can see below on your sentences, attempting to create longer sentences is very good. It can test your ability to combine simple and complex sentences altogether. The disadvantage is committing probable mistakes but without trying, you won\'t be able to make longer ones in the future. Hence, the goal is to make long and correct sentences.
Nevertheless, you had many correct sentences as well. I appreciate the extent of your details and discussions here on your answer.
Read the comments and suggestion carefully then. Excellent composition!
See you!
-T. Donna~
>> Well, before mentioning about the second job, I\'d like to comment about the reality that I have to work harder than Korea.
In the US, it is quite common to have second job because, there are many companies that they have small times to work, so it would be possible to work more.
>> In the US, it is quite common to have a second job because, there are many companies that have limited time to work, so it would be possible to work more.
It is impossible to imagine to find a second job in Korea since working time is already enough for employees.
>> Correct!
Anyway, I want to get a second job another dialysis unit.
>> Anyway, I want to get a second job from another dialysis unit.
In order to adjust in America\'s working places quickly, I\'d like to find another one as much as possible.
>> Correct!
Besides, I heard about school nurse that is having short time working hours such as 7-8 hours.
>> Besides, I heard about a school nurse that is having short time working hours such as 7-8 hours.
So, if given a chance, I want to try those fields.
>> Correct!
Therefore, finally, I want to live stably in the US in the near future.
>> Correct!
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