What kind of sports what I like
학생이 쓴 원문
The sports which I like the most is soccer. People in all ages can enjoy this sport. I love it because of its simplified rules. There are a lot of sports which have complicated rules. But soccer is so easy to understand and many people love it because of this reasons. Even though my soccer skill is really not good, I will love this sport forever.
강사 첨삭
Hi Harry,
Playing Soccer is a good and beneficial sport to play. Soccer improves your health due to shifts between walking, running, and sprinting so it lowers body fat and improves muscle tone, builds strength, flexibility, and endurance, increases muscle and bone strength. Soccer teaches you skills such as teamwork, perseverance, and decision making, that you\'ll be able to apply to all aspects of your life. It also helps you learn to weather the ups and downs of life, anticipate opportunities, and how to work with your peers to solve problems. ~ Teacher QUENNY ..:)
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The sports which I like the most is soccer.
>> The sport that I like the most is Soccer.(CORRECT)
People in all ages can enjoy this sport.
>> People of all ages can enjoy this sport.
I love it because of its simplified rules.
>> I love it because of its simplified rules. (CORRECT)
There are a lot of sports which have complicated rules.
>> There are a lot of sports which have complicated rules.
But soccer is so easy to understand and many people love it because of this reasons.
>> But soccer is so easy to understand and many people love it because of these reasons.
Even though my soccer skill is really not good, I will love this sport forever.
>> Even though my soccer skill is really not good enough, I will love this sport forever.
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The sports which I like the most is soccer. People in all ages can enjoy this sport. I love it because of its simplified rules. There are a lot of sports which have complicated rules. But soccer is so easy to understand and many people love it because of this reasons. Even though my soccer skill is really not good, I will love this sport forever.
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