What kind of success do you want in the future in your life?
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to get Happiness of family for success in my life. We all want to get a success. It is because we believe success makes us happy. When I was young, success was connected career. However, now, Family makes me happy more than career.
강사 첨삭
Hello Saki-San! :)
Thank you so much for answering your homework.
Have a wonderful day. :)
- Tricia
I want to get Happiness of family for success in my life.
>> I want to be successful in making my family happy.
We all want to get a success. It is because we believe success makes us happy.
>> We all want to be successful at something. It is because we believe success makes us happy.
When I was young, success was connected career.
>> When I was young, I used to think that success was connected to career.
However, now, Family makes me happy more than career.
>> But now, my family makes me happy more than my career.
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