What kinds of contents do you think should be shown more in the Youtube videos?

2019-06-28 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

학생이 쓴 원문

I individually want creators to show me exercise videos. because I`m interested in how to exercise more accurately and effectively. For example, Whenever doing exercise machine, I seldom feel that it accurately developed specific body parts. In order to prevent pain i have no choice but to register personnel training. Even though It is definite way to avoid injury, I will need spenditure. And I hope that when they are making a videos, they have responsibilites for speech,behaviors and contents. I understand attracting more subscribers is impotant to them who make a video. However they have to keep in [이름]d in affecting everything to the childerens. finally, when i choose videos, I think \"Are the videos making it including accurate information?.\"

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름] [이름]. Thank you for this. As audience or watchers, we also have a responsibility to choose what to watch and choose what to believe in everything we see in those videos.
- T. Beth
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I individually want creators to show me exercise videos. 
because I`m interested in how to exercise more accurately and effectively.
>>>  I personally want creators to show me exercise videos because I`m interested in how to exercise more accurately and effectively         
For example, Whenever doing exercise machine, I seldom feel that it accurately developed specific body parts.
>>> ORFor example, whenever I\'m using an exercise machine, I seldom feel that it accurately develops specific body parts.      
In order to prevent pain i have no choice but to register personnel training. 
>>>   In order to prevent pain, I have no choice but to hire a personal trainer.     
Even though It is definite way to avoid injury, I will need spenditure.
>>>  Even though it is a definite way to avoid injury, I will need to spend more.     
And I hope that when they are making a videos, they have responsibilites for speech,behaviors and contents.
>>>   And I hope that when they are making videos, they take responsibilities on their speech, behavior and contents.    
 I understand attracting more subscribers is impotant to them who make a video. 
>>>   I understand that attracting more subscribers is important for those who make videos.     
However they have to keep in [이름]d in affecting everything to the childerens.
>>> However, they have to consider everything including influencing children.      
finally, when i choose videos, I think \"Are the videos making it including accurate information?.\"
>>>   Finally, when I choose videos, I ask myself \"Are the videos showing accurate information?\"    

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