What Korean policy/law do you think should be removed?

2021-06-21 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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Its not a particular policy/law, but I think my country, Korea\'s laws are so weak. If somebody commited a big problem, he/she has to go to a prison, and he/she has to live in there very long times. But my country\'s laws are so weak, so he/she just has to go to a prison shorter than other country in the same situation. And my country\'s policies/laws protect criminal so much so we can\'t know who is criminal. So I think Korea goverment has to improve these things more nicely and safely for the citizens.

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Hi  [이름]! ^^

That\'s true! Criminals should be accountable with their actions. They should be punished with what they did. I totally agree with you. This should be changed. Thanks for sharing :) 

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Its not a particular policy/law, but I think my country, Korea\'s laws are so weak.
>> Its not a particular policy/law, but I think my country\'s laws are so weak. 

If somebody commited a big problem, he/she has to go to a prison, and he/she has to live in there very long times.
>> If someone commits a crime, he/she has to go to prison and be there for a very long time. 

But my country\'s laws are so weak, so he/she just has to go to a prison shorter than other country in the same situation.
>> But in my country, it\'s not like that. Criminals only go to jail for a short period of time regardless of the reason. 

And my country\'s policies/laws protect criminal so much so we can\'t know who is criminal.
>> In our country, they also protect the criminal\'s identity. 

So I think Korea goverment has to improve these things more nicely and safely for the citizens.
>> So I think that the Korean government has to improve these thing to make it more safe for the citizens. 

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