What makes a city great to live in?

2015-04-17 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Actually, I like the scenery of rural area but I cannot deny that living in a city is better than the countryside. There can be various factors to make a city great to live in. Firstly, the public transportation is convenient in a city. People in a city can utilize diverse public transportations such as a train, a subway, a bus, and a taxi; thus, without a car, people can go anywhere and anytime. On the other hand, in rural area, there are few transportations and they are run rarely for once an hour. It is very inconvenient. Secondly, more facilities are offered in a city including an institute and a department store and these things exist almost everywhere in a city. So, people living in a city can approach these facilities in no time. On the contrary, in rural area, people had difficulty using these facilities because it is difficult to build these facilities in the countryside due to little population. I think that two reasons above can be factors making a city great to live in.

강사 첨삭

Hello Miss [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework. I also agree with you that life in the city is more convenient. Anyway, have a great weekend! ~Kelly^^ Actually, I like the scenery of rural area but I cannot deny that living in a city is better than the countryside. >> Correct. There can be various factors to make a city great to live in. >> There can be various factors to make a city a great place to live in.Firstly, the public transportation is convenient in a city. >> Correct. People in a city can utilize diverse public transportations such as a train, a subway, a bus, and a taxi; thus, without a car, people can go anywhere and anytime. >> People in a city can utilize diverse public transportations such as trains, subways, buses, and taxis; thus, without a car, people cannot go anywhere and anytime. On the other hand, in rural area, there are few transportations and they are run rarely for once an hour. It is very inconvenient.>> On the other hand, in rural area, there are few transportations and the travel interval for public transportation is every hour. It is very inconvenient. >> Correct. Secondly, more facilities are offered in a city including an institute and a department store and these things exist almost everywhere in a city. >> Secondly, more facilities are offered in the city including institutes and department stores and these buildings exist almost everywhere. So, people living in a city can approach these facilities in no time. >> So, people living in a city have a faster access to these facilities. On the contrary, in rural area, people had difficulty using these facilities because it is difficult to build these facilities in the countryside due to little population. >> On the contrary, in rural area, there are few facilities because of the small population size. I think that two reasons above can be factors making a city great to live in. >> I think that the two reasons mentioned can be factors whay it is great to live in a city.

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