What makes an ideal weekend?
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In my opinion, spending a good time with loved ones makes an ideal weekend, especially with family and close friends.
First, even if I have spent a stressful time during the weekdays, I become more relaxed and gain energy by spending time together and talking with the ones who understand me. These people remind me of more important things other than my work and study.
Secondly, the time spent together becomes a memory that can be shared in the future. Especially, if I spend a special time such as experiencing a new thing or travelling, those times are easily memorable. For example, my family likes to talk about the trips that we went together several years ago. It is a great joy for me to recall a shared memory.
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Hi Cindy,
Thanks for finding the time to do your homework despite your hectic schedule:)
-Rachel
In my opinion, spending a good time with loved ones makes an ideal weekend, especially with family and close friends.
>> correct
>> In my opinion, spending a good time with loved ones especially with family and close friends makes an ideal weekend. (I just switched the two phrases)
First, even if I have spent a stressful time during the weekdays, I become more relaxed and gain energy by spending time together and talking with the ones who understand me. These people remind me of more important things other than my work and study.
First, even if I have spent a stressful time during the weekdays, I become more relaxed and gain energy by spending time together and talking with the ones who understand me. These people remind me of more important things other than my work and study.
>> correct
Secondly, the time spent together becomes a memory that can be shared in the future. Especially, if I spend a special time such as experiencing a new thing or travelling.
Secondly, the time spent together becomes a memory that can be shared in the future. Especially, if I spend a special time such as experiencing a new thing or travelling.
>> correct (this is acceptable in spoken English)
>>Secondly, the time spent together becomes a memory that can be shared in the future, especially if I spend a special time such as experiencing a new thing or travelling. (In written English, we avoid making a dependent clause stand alone)
Those times are easily memorable.
>> correct (we just need to write this as a new sentence to avoid run on sentences)
For example, my family likes to talk about the trips that we went together several years ago. It is a great joy for me to recall a shared memory.
>> correct
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