What makes annoy is..

2014-11-27 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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What makes annoy during the party is the rudeness of subordinates. They sometimes have mistakes in their doing like drunk driving and having a trouble with civilian. These makes really annoy because it can affect whole distribution in our base. Foutunately, I don't have any subordinates who did drunk driving but there was one guy who nearly having trouble with civilian. Having a party is good but when we have done something bad, the responsibility of having party became more weighter than usual time. As an officer, we always have to be cautious when we have party or drink alchol with anyone. Because our lord, Civilian want us to be polite, right, frugal. So we always think that we are the person who wear an uniform.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon [이름].

Great composition.

Keep it up.

What I notice is that you have to be really cautious and be polite at all times.

Thank you for sharing about your experiences too.

Have a nice day.

Teacher Nina


What makes annoy during the party is the rudeness of subordinates.

>> What makes me annoyed during a party is the rudeness of subordinates. 
They sometimes have mistakes in their doing like drunk driving and having a trouble with civilian.

>> They sometimes have mistakes in their actions like drunk driving and having troubles with a civilian.
These makes really annoy because it can affect whole distribution in our base.

>> These makes me really annoyed because it can affect the whole distribution in our base.
Foutunately, I don\'t have any subordinates who did drunk driving but there was one guy who nearly having trouble with civilian.

>> Fortunately, I don\'t have any subordinates who do drunk driving. But there was a guy who nearly had a trouble with a civilian,
Having a party is good but when we have done something bad, the responsibility of having party became more weighter than usual time.

>> Having a party is good but when we have done something bad, the responsibility of it became more heavier than the usual.
As an officer, we always have to be cautious when we have party or drink alchol with anyone.

>> As an officer, I should always be cautious when we have parties or when I drink alcohol with someone.
Because our lord, Civilian want us to be polite, right, frugal.

>> Because our Lord and civilians want us to be polite, right and frugal.
So we always think that we are the person who wear an uniform.

>> So we always think that we are the person who wears a uniform.

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