What makes me angry

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The most annoying thing that I cannot bear with is a behavior of rudeness.

>>The most annoying thing that I cannot bear is a rude behavior.

As we are living in 21st century, there is no doubt that we don’t have any trouble in contacting with people.

>> As we are living in the 21st century, there is no doubt that we don’t have any trouble in dealing with people.

Thanks to technology, we can reach to not only people we know but also to people we haven’t even met before such as celebrities.

>> Thanks to technology, we can reach not only the people we know but also people we haven’t even met before such as celebrities.

Using social media like facebook or instagram, we can easily have communication with each other.

>> Correct

However, some people misuse it and show bad behaviors regardless of the feeling that the other would have.

>> However, some people misuse these and show bad behaviors not taking into consideration the feeling that others would have.

Insulting is one of the examples.

>> Correct

It is easy for them to show aggressive behavior because they don’t know about the person personally.

>> It is easy for them to show aggressive behavior because they don’t know a person personally.

I believe people should be more polite when they treat the others.

>> I believe people should be more polite when they treat others.