What makes me happy?

2020-07-20 · 첨삭 강사 Sheila

학생이 쓴 원문

Theme: [Writing Task] What makes you happy? Make a short essay about this. I like playing Legos and making Legos. I have many Legos in my house. Playing Legos makes me happy. I like reading books and writing books and daydreaming. Daydreaming about my book makes me happy. Many other things makes me happy. I am happy person! : )

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework! 

You did well with your written homework. I got to know you more. :)

Until the next one!

See you in class tomorrow!

~Teacher Sheila


I like playing Legos and making Legos.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I like playing and making legos.

I have many Legos in my house.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I have a lot of legos in my house.

Playing Legos makes me happy.
>>CORRECT

I like reading books and writing books and daydreaming.
>>I like reading books, writing books, and daydreaming.

Daydreaming about my book makes me happy.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Imagining about my book makes me happy.

Many other things makes me happy.
>>Many other things make me happy.

I am happy person! : )
>>I am a happy person. 

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