What makes me happy?

2019-09-09 · 첨삭 강사 Sheila

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when I see something new, I am happy. For example, to travel in other counties, to study new subject in my second university, to meet a new person, etc. Something new makes me exciting. So I try to challenge from a daily life every times. Because I want to be clever and smart in my life. Life is only once in my mind.

강사 첨삭

Happy Monday [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework. It was great reading your composition. Thank you for sharing your thoughts through writing. Until the next one! :)

~Teacher Sheila


when I see something new, I am happy. 
>>When I see something new, I am happy.
OR>>When I see something new, it makes me happy.

For example, to travel in other counties, to study new subject in my second university,
to meet a new person, etc.
>>For example, to travel in other countries, to study new subjects in my second university, and to meet a new person, etc.
OR>>For example, traveling in other countries, studying a new subject in my second university, and meeting new people, etc.

Something new makes me exciting. 
>>Something new makes me excited.

So I try to challenge from a daily life every times.
>>So, I am always challenged from my daily life experiences.
OR>>So, I always try to challenge myself from my daily life experiences.

Because I want to be clever and smart in my life.
>>CORRECT

Life is only once in my mind.
>>Life is precious in my mind.
OR>>I put in my mind that we have only one life.

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