What makes me study english enthusiastically...

1.To begin with, It is what makes me study english more harder that is to achieve my goal. 2. It is imperative and integral part to become a succesful english teacher or pedagogue. 3.Second of all, Unequivocally, English is cosmopolitian and common language to communicate and comprehend. 4.Finally, Despite the fact that the ordeals and arduous matters are seveal and burdensome for me, However If it were not for them, I wouldn`t stand now here. 5.In other words, the pains and risks are the momentous factors to make myself to study harder and joyously. There are Only 5 sentences :D

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1.To begin with, It is what makes me study english more harder that is to achieve my goal.

>> To begin with, it is to achieve my goal that makes me study English harder.

 2. It is imperative and integral part to become a succesful english teacher or pedagogue.

>> It is an important aspect of becoming a successful English teacher.

 3.Second of all, Unequivocally, English is cosmopolitian and common language to communicate and comprehend.

>> Second of all, unequivocally, English is a cosmopolitan and a common language to communicate and comprehend.

 4.Finally, Despite the fact that the ordeals and arduous matters are seveal and burdensome for me, However If it were not for them, I wouldn`t stand now here.

>>Finally, if not for English, I wouldn't be where I am now.

 5.In other words, the pains and risks are the momentous factors to make myself to study harder and joyously.

>> Correct.

 There are Only 5 sentences :D

>> There are only 5 sentences. :D