What makes someone beautiful?

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Writing Task: What makes someone beautiful?

There are so many point that make someone beautiful.

>>There are so many points that make someone beautiful.

I think, ahead of everything, self-esteem is the most important.

>>CORRECT!

OR: I think self-esteem is the most important thing.

If someone has beautiful face, lots of knowledge, but no confidence, many people cannot notice how much someone is cool.

>>If a person has a beautiful face, a lot of knowledge but no confidence, many people don\'t notice how cool a person is.