What makes you happy?
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Thesedays, I don\'t really feel happy. I just do things that I have to finish, not actually doing things that I want to do. But, there are some ways or things that can make me happy. One way is to listen to music and play games or talk with my friends. When I listen to good music, I can be happy and feel good. Also, during listening to music, I play games and chat with my friends. It really feels fun and happy when I listen to music and play games. I will keep using my own way to be happy!
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Thesedays, I don\'t really feel happy.
>>These days, I don\'t really feel happy.
I just do things that I have to finish, not actually doing things that I want to do.
>>CORRECT
But, there are some ways or things that can make me happy.
>>CORRECT
One way is to listen to music and play games or talk with my friends.
>>CORRECT
OR>>One way is to listen to music, play games as well as talk with my friends.
When I listen to good music, I can be happy and feel good.
>>CORRECT
OR>>When I listen to a good song, I can be happy and feel good.
Also, during listening to music, I play games and chat with my friends.
>>Also, while listening to music, I play games and chat with my friends.
It really feels fun and happy when I listen to music and play games.
>>CORRECT
I will keep using my own way to be happy!
>>CORRECT
OR>>I will keep doing the things that make me happy.
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