What makes you happy?

2020-06-08 · 첨삭 강사 Jasper

학생이 쓴 원문

Dear [Name], I hope to be a ability man. that is, from my parents, my wife, my son, I want to be a necessary human being. I always warried about being a disability man from them. so I trid to make a something for them and be a succesful man. When I receive a credit from them, I felt a happy.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름], thank you for doing your homework. You did great. Keep it up. - T. Jasper

Here are your corrections:

Dear [Name],

I hope to be a ability man. that is, from my parents, my wife, my son, 
>> I hope to be a man with great ability to help my parents, wife, and son.

I want to be a necessary human being.
>> CORRECT

I always warried about being a disability man from them. so I trid to make a something for them and be a succesful man.
>> I\'m always worried about not being able to to do something for them so I try my best to become a successful man.

When I receive a credit from them, I felt a happy.
>> When I receive credit from them, I feel happy.

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