What motivates you?

2022-01-10 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I have been driven by digging into data and motivated to find what is causing the number. This process includes incorporating datasets with external resources. At my current position, I provide advice on the remuneration level to clients based on their market practices. This includes providing essential resources with EXCEL and incorporating external resources. I recently received a request to analyze the compensation level for the newly hired position. Since there was a regulated deadline regarding these positions, many companies had to hire these positions to avoid fines. However, there was no government guideline or precedents. Accordingly, I conducted a survey among market participants regarding salary expectations to provide the client with the market data. Alongside this, I collaborated with local attorney offices to learn more about the law. Eventually, the data from these reports assisted the client in hiring talented professionals while still fulfilling government regulations.

강사 첨삭

I have been driven by digging into data and motivated to find what is causing the number. 
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This process includes incorporating datasets with external resources. 
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At my current position, I provide advice on the remuneration level to clients based on their market practices. 
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This includes providing essential resources with EXCEL and incorporating external resources. 
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I recently received a request to analyze the compensation level for the newly hired position. 
>>> correct   
Since there was a regulated deadline regarding these positions, many companies had to hire these positions to avoid fines. 
>>> correct
>>> OR: Since there was a regulated deadline regarding these positions, many companies had to hire for these positions to avoid fines.   
However, there was no government guideline or precedents. 
>>> correct 
Accordingly, I conducted a survey among market participants regarding salary expectations to provide the client with the market data. 
>>>  correct   
Alongside this, I collaborated with local attorney offices to learn more about the law. 
>>>   correct 
Eventually, the data from these reports assisted the client in hiring talented professionals while still fulfilling government regulations.
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