What motivates you to apply for this position?
학생이 쓴 원문
Let me tell you the reason why I applied for trade strategy position. First of all, I think I’m a suitable person for this position because I have a good trouble shooting skill. I think my position is a kind of troubleshooter of the company because main job for this position is to treat trade remedies such as safeguard, anti-dumping, and countervailing-duty matters. I’m sure that I can get used to my job quickly and make the performance based on my career experience and strengths.
I’ve been responsible for resolving various irregular occasions such as space issue, equipment shortage, and vessel delay. I’m sure that this experience is going to be pretty useful when dealing with the international regulatory issues.
Second, I got to know that how important the steel industry is among the various kinds of industries. As I know, steel product helps to boost and improve the national competitiveness by making the use of it in many fields
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>>Let me tell you the reason why I applied for the trade strategy position.
First of all, I think I’m a suitable person for this position because I have a good trouble shooting skill.
>>First of all, I think I’m a suitable person for this position because I have good trouble shooting skills.
I think my position is a kind of troubleshooter of the company because main job for this position is to treat trade remedies such as safeguard, anti-dumping, and countervailing-duty matters.
>>My current job is to kind of do some troubleshooting for the company because my main job is to provide trade solutions such as safeguarding, anti-dumping and countervailing-duty matters.
I’m sure that I can get used to my job quickly and make the performance based on my career experience and strengths.
>>I’m sure that I can get used to my job quickly and perform well based on my career experience and strengths.
I’ve been responsible for resolving various irregular occasions such as space issue, equipment shortage, and vessel delay. I’m sure that this experience is going to be pretty useful when dealing with the international regulatory issues.
I’ve been responsible for resolving various irregular occasions such as space issue, equipment shortage, and vessel delay. I’m sure that this experience is going to be pretty useful when dealing with the international regulatory issues.
>>I’ve been responsible for resolving various irregularities such as space issues, equipment shortages, and vessel delays. I’m sure that this experience is going to be pretty useful when dealing with the international regulatory issues.
Second, I got to know that how important the steel industry is among the various kinds of industries. As I know, steel product helps to boost and improve the national competitiveness by making the use of it in many fields
Second, I got to know that how important the steel industry is among the various kinds of industries. As I know, steel product helps to boost and improve the national competitiveness by making the use of it in many fields
>>Second, I got to know how important the steel industry is among the various kinds of industries. As far as I know, steel products help boost and improve the national competitiveness because it is used in many fields.
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