What motivates you to keep working?

2022-02-02 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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The gratification of overcoming an obstacle is my motivator. Exceeding the expectation through constant learning thrills me. For example, I am currently working at a consulting firm where I had to provide clients with advice based on their human capital management practices. Even though the analysis was based on reading a market trend through data analytics, I needed some insight into human resources practices. However, from my previous experience, including university, I haven’t had an opportunity to deeply engage in human resources matters. Accordingly, I went through some after-work studies, from basic terminologies to overall HR trends, through various articles and analyses published by research institutions. Currently, I can provide a customer with advice based on data and market trend analysis, which led to a 50% growth in the customer base. The feeling of accomplishment that comes with exceeding challenges drew me to a career in data analytics in the financial service industry.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Aciel!

The gratification of overcoming an obstacle is my motivator. 
>>>>   correct 
Exceeding the expectation through constant learning thrills me. 
>>>>   correct 
For example, I am currently working at a consulting firm where I had to provide clients with advice based on their human capital management practices. 
>>>>  correct 
>>>> OR: For example, I am currently working at a consulting firm where I have to provide clients with advice based on their human capital management practices.   
Even though the analysis was based on reading a market trend through data analytics, I needed some insight into human resources practices. 
>>>> OREven though the analysis was based on reading a market trend through data analytics, I needed some insight on human resources practices.    
However, from my previous experience, including university, I haven’t had an opportunity to deeply engage in human resources matters. 
>>>>  correct   
Accordingly, I went through some after-work studies, from basic terminologies to overall HR trends, through various articles and analyses published by research institutions. 
>>>> correct    
Currently, I can provide a customer with advice based on data and market trend analysis, which led to a 50% growth in the customer base. 
>>>> correct     
The feeling of accomplishment that comes with exceeding challenges drew me to a career in data analytics in the financial service industry.
>>>>  correct   

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