What new features would you like to see on social networking sites?

2019-11-04 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I think they should not upgrade anymore. I am satisfied with the current features of social media. Also, I am worried about negative effects when they develop new features. Especially, the identity theft problem will be increased by improving social networking sites. That\'s why I disagree with enhancing social media.

강사 첨삭

Hello Chloe! Thank you for this.  Come to think of it, you do have a point. We\'ll see for sure.
- T. Beth
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I think they should not upgrade anymore.
>>>  correct 
I am satisfied with the current features of social media.
>>>  correct 
Also, I am worried about negative effects when they develop new features.
>>> Also, I am worried about the negative effects when they develop new features.  
Especially, the identity theft problem will be increased by improving social networking sites.
>>> correct  
>>> OR: Especially, identity theft problem will increase though the improvement of social networking sites.
That\'s why I disagree with enhancing social media.
>>>  correct 

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