What other classes in school would you want to attend?

2020-09-14 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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Theme: What other classes in school would you want to attend? I want to attend Yoga, Cooking, Science, Violine, Basketball and so. I want to learn Yoga and Basketball because I want to have some excercise. I want to learn Cooking because I want to help my mom cooking foods. I want to learn Science because my dream job is scientest and doctor and both needs to learn science. And I want to learn Violine because I want to learn 1 or more musical instrument!

강사 첨삭

Here\'s your second composition, Claire!
Catch you on Wednesday!

Cheers,
Jean~~

Theme: What other classes in school would you want to attend?

I want to attend Yoga, Cooking, Science, Violin, Basketball and so.
>> I want to attend yoga, cooking, science, violin, basketball, and so on.

I want to learn Yoga and Basketball because I want to have some excercise.
>> I want to learn how to do yoga and play basketball because I want to have some exercise.

I want to learn Cooking because I want to help my mom cooking foods.
>> I want to learn how to cook because I want to help my mom cook or prepare food. 

I want to learn Science because my dream job is scientest and doctor and both needs to learn science.
>> I want to learn science because my dream job is to be a scientist and a doctor and I need to learn science in both professions. 

And I want to learn Violine because I want to learn 1 or more musical instrument!
>> And I want to learn how to play the violin because I want to learn one or more musical instruments!

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