What other problems or complications do you know of can arise from obesity other than just a fat bod
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1. Fat body is just like an appearance matter, and who judges whether someone has a fat body or not?
>>Having a fat body is just a matter of appearances. Who judges whether someone is fat or not, anyway?
2. That’s just by themselves, and we can’t make a standard.
>>They do that for themselves and we can\'t make a standard for that.
3. However, obesity is different. It’s a disease, and it should be cured.
>>CORRECT!
4. We should tackle this matter by WHO.
>>We should tackle this matter with the WHO.
5. Obesity can causes other problems such as adult diseases, can be a trigger to go to the big diseases.
>>Obesity can causes other problems such as adult diseases, it can also lead to worse diseases.
6. That’s the difference between fat body and obesity.
>>That\'s the difference between just having a fat body and obesity.
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