What other problems or complications do you know of can arise from obesity other than just a fat bod

2019-07-30 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

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Fat body is just like an appearance matter, and who judges whether someone has a fat body or not? That’s just by themselves, and we can’t make a standard. However, obesity is different. It’s a disease, and it should be cured. We should tackle this matter by WHO. Obesity can causes other problems such as adult diseases, can be a trigger to go to the big diseases. That’s the difference between fat body and obesity.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!

You made another well-written composition today. Thank you for your time and effort in doing this despite your busy schedule. See you later! ^^

~~Teacher Kate


1. Fat body is just like an appearance matter, and who judges whether someone has a fat body or not?

>>Having a fat body is just a matter of appearances. Who judges whether someone is fat or not, anyway?

2. That’s just by themselves, and we can’t make a standard.

>>They do that for themselves and we can\'t make a standard for that.

3. However, obesity is different. It’s a disease, and it should be cured.

>>CORRECT!

4. We should tackle this matter by WHO.

>>We should tackle this matter with the WHO.

5. Obesity can causes other problems such as adult diseases, can be a trigger to go to the big diseases.

>>Obesity can causes other problems such as adult diseases, it can also lead to worse diseases.

6. That’s the difference between fat body and obesity.

>>That\'s the difference between just having a fat body and obesity.

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