What part of the way you look are you happiest with (and why)?

2018-05-02 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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Self-regard is the most important to be happiest. It is because loving myself will be a good way to be calm in the complex relationship. Self-regard can make people live more easily in an unexpected situation. For example, last year, I had to move to a new team in my work place. I didn't want to work in a new team with new colleagues at first. I had been accustomed to work in the present team already, also I thought the new team didn't have important position in the company comparing to the present team. Because of that, when my boss asked me work in the new team I was too sad. However, I decided to change my mind. I thought that I was a right person to conduct an important project in the new team. I believed that I had enough ability to work. I believed in myself. After several month, the new project was finished successfully, and I was promoted to a department head. For this reason, believing in myself will make people be happiest.

강사 첨삭

 Hi there [이름]!(\",)

Thank you for finding time to answer your homework. You explained your ideas/thoughts extremely well. Keep it up!(\",)

~T. Lynn 

Self-regard is the most important to be happiest.

>> Self-regard is the most important to be happy.

OR>> Self-regard is the most important to achieve your happiest moment.

It is because loving myself will be a good way to be calm in a complex relationship. 

>> correct!
 Self-regard can make people live more easily in an unexpected situation.
>> correct!
For example, last year, I had to move to a new team in my work place.

>> correct!

I didn\'t want to work in a new team with new colleagues at first.

>> correct!

I had been accustomed to work in the present team already, also I thought the new team didn\'t have important position in the company comparing to the present team.

>> I had been accustomed working with the present team, I also thought the new team didn\'t have important position in the company compared to the present team.

Because of that, when my boss asked me work in the new team, I was too sad.

>> Because of that, when my boss asked me to work with the new team, I was too/very sad.

However, I decided to change my mind.

>> However I have decided to chnage my mindset.

I thought that I was a right person to conduct an important project in the new team.

>> I thought that I was the right person to conduct an important project in the new team.

I believed that I had enough ability to work. I believed in myself.

>> correct!

After several months, the new project was finished successfully, and I was promoted to a department head.
>> correct!
For this reason, believing in myself will make people be happiest.

>> For this reason, believing in one\'s self will  make people the happiest.

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