What part of the way you look are you happiest with (and why)?
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Self-regard is the most important to be happiest.
>> Self-regard is the most important to be happy.
OR>> Self-regard is the most important to achieve your happiest moment.
It is because loving myself will be a good way to be calm in a complex relationship.
>> correct!
Self-regard can make people live more easily in an unexpected situation.
>> correct!
For example, last year, I had to move to a new team in my work place.
>> correct!
I didn\'t want to work in a new team with new colleagues at first.
>> correct!
I had been accustomed to work in the present team already, also I thought the new team didn\'t have important position in the company comparing to the present team.
>> I had been accustomed working with the present team, I also thought the new team didn\'t have important position in the company compared to the present team.
Because of that, when my boss asked me work in the new team, I was too sad.
>> Because of that, when my boss asked me to work with the new team, I was too/very sad.
However, I decided to change my mind.
>> However I have decided to chnage my mindset.
I thought that I was a right person to conduct an important project in the new team.
>> I thought that I was the right person to conduct an important project in the new team.
I believed that I had enough ability to work. I believed in myself.
>> correct!
After several months, the new project was finished successfully, and I was promoted to a department head.
>> correct!
For this reason, believing in myself will make people be happiest.
>> For this reason, believing in one\'s self will make people the happiest.
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