What part of your Korean history is your favorite? Explain why.

2021-11-12 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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In the past, Korea had many wars and they were very painful to my ancestor. A lot of people died because of those wars, and a lot of people despaired because of them. So I think all the periods that Korea didn\'t have war are my favorite history. Having no war is one of the greatest blessings for us and for all the people. That\'s why I think the periods that Korea didn\'t have war are my favorite history.

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Hi [이름]:)

That\'s a fair point. I think no one really likes wars.

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In the past, Korea had many wars and they were very painful to my ancestor.

>> In the past, Korea had many wars and it was a bad time for my ancestors.

A lot of people died because of those wars, and a lot of people despaired because of them.

>> A lot of people died because of those wars, and a lot of people were despaired because of them.

So I think all the periods that Korea didn\'t have war are my favorite history.

>> So I think that the periods when there were no wars in South Korea are my favorite parts of our history.

Having no war is one of the greatest blessings for us and for all the people.

>> CORRECT

That\'s why I think the periods that Korea didn\'t have war are my favorite history.

>> That\'s why I think the periods that Korea didn\'t have war are my favorite parts of history.

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