What period of history in your country would you like to go back and live in?
학생이 쓴 원문
Korea\'s whole entire history was being invaded or fighting against enemies. If not, the rest history was about dictatorship. So I want to say that since Korea history had no age of peace, my best period of history is a recent decade. 30 years ago, there was dictatorship by general, which was about to end. Again 40 years ago, the dictaor has killed 7200 people making innocent people who were protesting the president communist. Again 60 years ago the first president in Korea has escaped to Hawaii. Our history is eventfulness so I want to live in here 2020.
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Thank you so much for answering your home, [이름]
I think we have the same history.
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~Teacher James
Korea\'s whole entire history was being invaded or fighting against enemies.
>>> CORRECT
If not, the rest history was about dictatorship.
>>> If not, the rest of the history was about dictatorship.
So I want to say that since Korea history had no age of peace, my best period of history is a recent decade.
>>> CORRECT
30 years ago, there was dictatorship by general, which was about to end.
>>> 30 years ago, there was a dictatorship by general, which was about to end.
Again 40 years ago, the dictaor has killed 7200 people making innocent people who were protesting the president communist.
>>> Again 40 years ago, the dictator has killed 7200 people who are innocent and who were protesting the president regime.
Again 60 years ago the first president in Korea has escaped to Hawaii. Our history is eventfulness so I want to live in here 2020.
>>> Again 60 years ago the first president in Korea has escaped to Hawaii. Our history is eventfulness so I want to live in 2020.
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