What period of history would you like to go back and live in? Why?

2021-09-21 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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In my opinion, present, now is the best period of history so I just want to live in this period. I have my family, and my frineds, so I am happy to live. I think I am luckest guy in this world because I met this family and I met my friends. So I am satisfying with my life and I think I have to satisfy my life. But if I go to the other periods, I will meet other family and other people. And it will make me very unhappy if I am ownning my memories of now. Becuase of that, I think now is the best period of history so I just want to live in this period.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! :)

There are some people who are curious about what it was like to live in our world before. Everything was totally different. But for me, I think not many people would be willing to go back more than a few decades. 

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In my opinion, present, now is the best period of history so I just want to live in this period.
>> In my opinion, the present is the best period in history so I just want to live in this period.

I have my family, and my frineds, so I am happy to live.
>> I have my family and my friends so I am happy with my life.

I think I am luckest guy in this world because I met this family and I met my friends.
>> I think I am the luckiest guy in the world because of my family and I met my friends.

So I am satisfying with my life and I think I have to satisfy my life.
>> With that, I am satisfied with my life. 

But if I go to the other periods, I will meet other family and other people.
>> If I go back to another period, I will meet another family and friends. 

And it will make me very unhappy if I am ownning my memories of now.
>> It will make me very unhappy if this was only a memory for me. 

Becuase of that, I think now is the best period of history so I just want to live in this period.
>> And because of that, I think the present it the best period in history so I just want to stay in this period. 

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