What place would you like to visit soon?
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I want to travel abroad a lot, especially Southeast Asia and Europe.
Actually if there is no a self-quarantine after traveling abroad, I must go a trip to other countries. But now It’s very hard due to COVID-19.
In that situation, the place I want to go at first is Bohol in Philippine. I heard that it’s a nice place, so I’ll go there and enjoy the view.
And than If I can take days off more than 7days, I want to visit to Europe. One of my favorite cities is Landon. I’ve been there during winter 5years ago and I could enjoy the Christmas market. It was very good experience.But the sun was very short. At 4pm it was getting dark. So I want to go in summer, and enjoy sightseeing much time.
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Hi Elena!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. CamilleI want to travel abroad a lot, especially Southeast Asia and Europe.
>> I want to travel abroad a lot, especially in Southeast Asia and Europe.
Actually if there is no a self-quarantine after traveling abroad, I must go a trip to other countries.
>> Actually if there is no a self-quarantine after traveling abroad, I will definitely go on a trip to other countries.
But now It’s very hard due to COVID-19.
>> CORRECT!
In that situation, the place I want to go at first is Bohol in Philippine.
>> In that situation, the place that I want to go at first is Bohol in the Philippines.
I heard that it’s a nice place, so I’ll go there and enjoy the view.
>> CORRECT!
And than If I can take days off more than 7days, I want to visit to Europe.
And than If I can take days off more than 7days, I want to visit to Europe.
>> And If I can take days off for more than 7days, I want to visit Europe.
One of my favorite cities is Landon.
>> One of my favorite cities is London.
I’ve been there during winter 5years ago and I could enjoy the Christmas market.
>> I’ve been there during the Winter season 5 years ago, and I could enjoy the Christmas market.
It was very good experience.
>> It was a very good experience.
But the sun was very short.
>> CORRECT!
At 4pm it was getting dark.
>> CORRECT!So I want to go in summer, and enjoy sightseeing much time.
>> So I want to go there in Summer, and enjoy sightseeing if I have much time.
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