What places in your country would you recommend for foreign tourists?

2023-05-12 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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What places in your country would you recommend for foreign tourists? Korea has many attractive places. Among them, I recommended city is “Gang[이름] do”. This city is located the east sea. So, there are many seas food, and has many beaches. Most of all “Yang-yang beach” is filming site of BTS’s music video. So, this beach has many tourists. Another popular beach name is “Young jin beach”. This place is filming site of Korea drama “goblin”. So many people visited this place and copied a drama scene. A female main character putted on red muffler, male main character has flower on his hand. And they are face each other. People’s take picture like this scene. So, nearby this place, many sellers to sell red muffler, and flowers! This area has many temples. Especially “Naksan” temple is very famous to people. I went to this place, that is so [이름]derful landscape! and behind of temple, located hotel, this place is very beautiful too. If you have a time, visit to \"Gang[이름] do\" at once~

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this [이름] [이름]. K-dramas are indeed popular to many people.

Korea has many attractive places. 
>>>  correct
Among them, I recommended city is “Gang[이름] do”.
>>> Among them, the city I recommended is “Gang[이름] do”.  
>>> OR: Among them, I recommended the city of “Gang[이름] do”.
This city is located the east sea. 
>>>  This city is located in the east sea.
So, there are many seas food, and has many beaches.
>>> So, there are many seafood and has many beaches. 
Most of all, “Yang-yang beach” is the filming site of BTS’s music video. 
>>> correct 
So, this beach has many tourists. 
>>>  correct
Another popular beach name is “Young jin beach”. 
>>> correct 
This place is filming site of Korea drama “goblin”.
>>>  This place is the filming site of the Korean drama “goblin”.
So many people visited this place and copied a drama scene. 
>>> correct  
A female main character putted on red muffler, male main character has flower on his hand. 
>>> A female main character put on a red muffler, male main character has flowers on his hand.  
>>> OR:  The female main character wears a red muffler and the male main character has flowers on his hand.  
And they are face each other. 
>>And they are facing each other.  
People’s take picture like this scene. 
>>> People take pictures mimicing this scene. 
So, nearby this place, many sellers to sell red muffler, and flowers!
>>So, nearby this place, many sellers are selling red mufflers and flowers! 
This area has many temples. 
>>> correct  
Especially “Naksan” temple is very famous to people. 
>>> correct  
I went to this place, that is so [이름]derful landscape! and behind of temple, located hotel, this place is very beautiful too.
>>> I went to this place and it is such a [이름]derful landscape! Behind the temple is a hotel, this place is very beautiful too. 
If you have a time, visit to \"Gang[이름] do\" at once~
>>>  correct

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